Post by rorschalk on Sept 26, 2024 19:57:09 GMT
Dear Mr. VC,
According to Rockefeller, you must state your case quicker. Here's the full frontal. Au revoir and best of luck!
rockefeller sez:
The first time I tried to read this Geese cap was during a presidential debate between a mentally ill narcissist and a deep-state ninny. Both were unlikeable, albeit for different reasons. The narcissist, as one would expect, was just too full of himself, and got suckered into too much bravado and bragging. The ninny was an admixture of marmy scolding, inane promises and empty rhetoric. But despite transparently lopsided moderation and my only having been able to stomach a half hour or so, I gave it to the mental case. He, at least, took on the four of them, seemed to believe his bullshit, paid some lip service to the dead on both sides in the ninny's admin's second latest proxy war, expressed concern about nuclear weapons and WW3 (now arguably underway) and seemed the more ingenuous of the two. So I thought maybe my inability to get into this Geese thing had more to do with the debate's idiocracies than the cap's. So this morning, with a fresh and undistracted head, I gave it another shot.
Not sure why, but gmail still couldn't preview it, had to open it in Google docs, which I would suggest the VC, really everyone, also do before submitting or publishing. The text's not rife with spelling and grammatical errors, but enough to give one pause. On the other hand, it's pretty articulate, even erudite in a turgid sort of way. So much so that I had trouble pairing the voice with the main and only character as presented from a tight limited 3rd POV. But again, three or four pages in, and it's still just this kid waking from some NREM dream state. Very well described, but, as with that irksome debate, not enough to see me through to the end. I'm old(ish). I, maybe even my species, teeters on the verge of extinction. Time is precious. Don't waste it. Get to the point, to your titular promise, be my advice. As to touching the Monkey via our denizens above, I'm afraid it's a nyet.