Post by rorschalk on Jun 26, 2024 15:41:56 GMT
As far as the graphic description of the genitalia. I think it's too much and possibly takes away from the impact of the more important psychological stuff going on. Can we tone it down by half or something? If not, that's OK, but I really think as it is it's rather jarring. But that's just me.
I was born in Portland. Never really lived there since we moved to Europe when I was 6 months old. But we used to go back a lot. Now, not so much. Love Powells! Bought a copy of Thomas Wolfe's LOOK HOMEWARD, ANGEL there and gave it to a girl I had a fling with before moving on. Long story...which I made short.
Do you have someone whose judgment you trust who could read both versions, the one with the graphic descriptors of Elias's erection and the one without and ask them which one is better? I really think it's unnecessarily graphic as it is now and detracts from the more important messages being conveyed. That being said, there may be a happy median as I suggested in last night's message. Perhaps an extra sentence is warranted but an entire paragraph devoted to it is overkill to me.
I was born in Portland. Never really lived there since we moved to Europe when I was 6 months old. But we used to go back a lot. Now, not so much. Love Powells! Bought a copy of Thomas Wolfe's LOOK HOMEWARD, ANGEL there and gave it to a girl I had a fling with before moving on. Long story...which I made short.
Do you have someone whose judgment you trust who could read both versions, the one with the graphic descriptors of Elias's erection and the one without and ask them which one is better? I really think it's unnecessarily graphic as it is now and detracts from the more important messages being conveyed. That being said, there may be a happy median as I suggested in last night's message. Perhaps an extra sentence is warranted but an entire paragraph devoted to it is overkill to me.
