Post by rorschalk on Jun 15, 2023 20:50:25 GMT
Dear Mr. VC,
The curtain's come down on ENCORE. See the terminal critique pasted below.
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Moo, moo, moo, bitches!
The Bulldog is lamenting the lack of public healthcare here in the US. Surgery needs to be had, but the cost is out of reach. The Bullmeister is racing against the clock to get Bessie the care she needs before tragedy sets in.
So, the Bull is in a shit mood. Most things seem trivial in contrast to this insanity.
But the Bull managed to take a gander at this here cap “Encore”.
The cap could use a little clean up. There were some punctuation errors and such, a question mark here, a hyphen there. No big deal.
It’s a tale of self-punishment and guilt focusing on a once up-and-coming rock star, Albert, now relegated to being a janitor. He’s sucked into a reunion gig and starts seeing ghosts.
It’s a decent cap, but it just didn’t hold the Bulldog’s attention that much, but disclaimer, the Bull is not at his best. It’s a no for Bulldust. Maybe the Fishy one will dig it and make this a tie.
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8 hours ago Post OptionsPost by sturgeon on 8 hours ago
Alright, already. I've been slow to review this one, but hey, life in the fast lane ain't all it's cracked up to be.
I was ready to love this cap - it started so promisingly, with a dejected high school janitor getting accosted by a woman that drags up glamour and tragedy from his past. A past he has spent nearly 50 years trying to move on from.
It's a great dramatic situation, and I was looking forward to watching him battle with his internal struggles and the demons of his past. Will he realise that facing up to his guilt is the only way to finally let go?
Yep, he will realise that. Pretty easily, it turns out.
He does put up token resistance, but the story beats play out predictably. It's well written, and fun to read, but there's just not enough of the unexpected. Two-thirds of the way through we do get something a little different - a hint of the supernatural maybe? But the ending is disappointingly flat.
How can I say that?! The ending has him hanging from a branch off a cliff, making a decades-overdue reconciliation with his oldest friend - and I called it a FLAT ENDING?
Well yeah, kind of. For two reasons. One, I wasn't as emotionally invested as I should have been - because I didn't get enough of a sense of struggle, of friction, on his journey to self-absolution. Two, because the catalyst for his healing was a couple of notes purported to be from his deceased loved one, which propels him to his destiny as if "surrendering to [his] compulsion" - in other words, he heals because external events herded him that way, not by dint of his own agency.
It's a good cap, which is precisely why my criticism is so harsh - because I believe the VC can achieve great things.
I vote no.
The curtain's come down on ENCORE. See the terminal critique pasted below.
***
Moo, moo, moo, bitches!
The Bulldog is lamenting the lack of public healthcare here in the US. Surgery needs to be had, but the cost is out of reach. The Bullmeister is racing against the clock to get Bessie the care she needs before tragedy sets in.
So, the Bull is in a shit mood. Most things seem trivial in contrast to this insanity.
But the Bull managed to take a gander at this here cap “Encore”.
The cap could use a little clean up. There were some punctuation errors and such, a question mark here, a hyphen there. No big deal.
It’s a tale of self-punishment and guilt focusing on a once up-and-coming rock star, Albert, now relegated to being a janitor. He’s sucked into a reunion gig and starts seeing ghosts.
It’s a decent cap, but it just didn’t hold the Bulldog’s attention that much, but disclaimer, the Bull is not at his best. It’s a no for Bulldust. Maybe the Fishy one will dig it and make this a tie.
sturgeon
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8 hours ago Post OptionsPost by sturgeon on 8 hours ago
Alright, already. I've been slow to review this one, but hey, life in the fast lane ain't all it's cracked up to be.
I was ready to love this cap - it started so promisingly, with a dejected high school janitor getting accosted by a woman that drags up glamour and tragedy from his past. A past he has spent nearly 50 years trying to move on from.
It's a great dramatic situation, and I was looking forward to watching him battle with his internal struggles and the demons of his past. Will he realise that facing up to his guilt is the only way to finally let go?
Yep, he will realise that. Pretty easily, it turns out.
He does put up token resistance, but the story beats play out predictably. It's well written, and fun to read, but there's just not enough of the unexpected. Two-thirds of the way through we do get something a little different - a hint of the supernatural maybe? But the ending is disappointingly flat.
How can I say that?! The ending has him hanging from a branch off a cliff, making a decades-overdue reconciliation with his oldest friend - and I called it a FLAT ENDING?
Well yeah, kind of. For two reasons. One, I wasn't as emotionally invested as I should have been - because I didn't get enough of a sense of struggle, of friction, on his journey to self-absolution. Two, because the catalyst for his healing was a couple of notes purported to be from his deceased loved one, which propels him to his destiny as if "surrendering to [his] compulsion" - in other words, he heals because external events herded him that way, not by dint of his own agency.
It's a good cap, which is precisely why my criticism is so harsh - because I believe the VC can achieve great things.
I vote no.