Post by rorschalk on Apr 10, 2023 13:57:16 GMT
Dear Mr. VC,
We've got a verdict and it's a thumbs down.
Here's the nitty gritty of Rox' review:
...But the biggest problem for me, besides that I'm not really into fantasy and the genre's typical want of meaningful metaphors and symbols, was its objective POV. I almost always hate this detached, fly-on-the-wall point of view. I need to know who's telling the tale, and why. If by the 3rd or 4th page I still don't care about any of the characters (or species, or life forms), I'm gonna skim.
And so, despite some really beautiful description and rich (to turgid) language, it is with a heavy heart (and elongated testicles) that I'm consigning it to The Deluge.
Given the VC's obvious writing abilities, I'm going to suggest she (or whatever the preferred pronoun) recast it in the limited 3rd, or even 1st, person. Also, given the amount of dialog, let characters speak in more varied and identifiable voices. And, finally, try to generate more specific parallels to and analyses of the myriad problems facing our species today. Though in all fairness, it did embarrass me to be human as does the status quo.
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You can read the full review WK37 on the floor. Thanks again for hanging in there with us. We're half a carburetor short of the "The Little Engine That Could" these latter daze, so ... there... like I said, thanks for hanging.
We've got a verdict and it's a thumbs down.
Here's the nitty gritty of Rox' review:
...But the biggest problem for me, besides that I'm not really into fantasy and the genre's typical want of meaningful metaphors and symbols, was its objective POV. I almost always hate this detached, fly-on-the-wall point of view. I need to know who's telling the tale, and why. If by the 3rd or 4th page I still don't care about any of the characters (or species, or life forms), I'm gonna skim.
And so, despite some really beautiful description and rich (to turgid) language, it is with a heavy heart (and elongated testicles) that I'm consigning it to The Deluge.
Given the VC's obvious writing abilities, I'm going to suggest she (or whatever the preferred pronoun) recast it in the limited 3rd, or even 1st, person. Also, given the amount of dialog, let characters speak in more varied and identifiable voices. And, finally, try to generate more specific parallels to and analyses of the myriad problems facing our species today. Though in all fairness, it did embarrass me to be human as does the status quo.
***
You can read the full review WK37 on the floor. Thanks again for hanging in there with us. We're half a carburetor short of the "The Little Engine That Could" these latter daze, so ... there... like I said, thanks for hanging.
