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Post by rorschalk on Jun 10, 2019 18:44:55 GMT
Sat, Jun 8, 8:29 AM (2 days ago)
Excellent critique Rockaplast. It has a twist ending! Didn't see it coming. But then the sentence about Dr. Finkler get his comeuppance again and again and again came back to me and made it clear the cap was a tad repetitive. Nice work!
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Post by rockefeller on Jun 11, 2019 13:22:51 GMT
Thanks! Glad you liked. Was very close call. Might still need tie break. Whenever I see telekinesis I always wonder why the telekinetic person didn't just pinch shut an artery or pluck some crucial nerve. Easier than conjuring up a gigantic storm here I'd think. Like so many stories (mine included), it read to me like it didn't have a clue where it was heading when it began its journey.
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