Post by rorschalk on Mar 14, 2022 13:09:09 GMT
Dear Mr. VC,
No dice. I got to page 7 but had to stop because the dialogue between the two grive diggers was just interminable. I got a Lenny-like vibe (ie Of Mice and Men) from the guy that wanted to check the casket, but, like I said, it took a couple thousand words to get to the point where the guy driving the truck finally turned off the engine and then still more kvetching? I don't know if the narrative redeemed itself farther into the story because getting there was the problem, and since my expectation meter was set so high it was an easy pass. Thank you for the submission.
No dice. I got to page 7 but had to stop because the dialogue between the two grive diggers was just interminable. I got a Lenny-like vibe (ie Of Mice and Men) from the guy that wanted to check the casket, but, like I said, it took a couple thousand words to get to the point where the guy driving the truck finally turned off the engine and then still more kvetching? I don't know if the narrative redeemed itself farther into the story because getting there was the problem, and since my expectation meter was set so high it was an easy pass. Thank you for the submission.