Post by deplancher on Nov 20, 2021 2:42:18 GMT
Bonjour, JaneVC:
Merci beaucoup for your perseverance in submitting works for our consideration here at TQR Headquarters under the broken bridge of nowhere. It is a brave act for anyone.
Bishop Bob might have done itself some good starting on page 8 with the litany of inane complaints delivered for the bishop to resolve. To engage today's lazy reader, there must be movement, a spark. Something to pique curiosity, to ask: what's going on here? at least enough so that we want to find out. All the mundane detail of the previous seven pages of prose is, if I may, simply too pedestrian to hold our interest.
Of course, all is merely my subjective opinion.
I cannot recommend Bishop Bob for advancement to the next stage of editorial review.
Merci et bonne chance,
DeP
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Gabrielle DePlancher
The Floor
www.tqrstories.com
Merci beaucoup for your perseverance in submitting works for our consideration here at TQR Headquarters under the broken bridge of nowhere. It is a brave act for anyone.
Bishop Bob might have done itself some good starting on page 8 with the litany of inane complaints delivered for the bishop to resolve. To engage today's lazy reader, there must be movement, a spark. Something to pique curiosity, to ask: what's going on here? at least enough so that we want to find out. All the mundane detail of the previous seven pages of prose is, if I may, simply too pedestrian to hold our interest.
Of course, all is merely my subjective opinion.
I cannot recommend Bishop Bob for advancement to the next stage of editorial review.
Merci et bonne chance,
DeP
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Gabrielle DePlancher
The Floor
www.tqrstories.com