Post by rockefeller on Oct 20, 2021 16:24:45 GMT
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Oct 6, 2021 at 11:54am QuotelikePost OptionsPost by rockefeller on Oct 6, 2021 at 11:54am
Over twenty years of gatekeeping/slushreading, and this is the first time I've seen a submission with no cover letter. Just an attachment. I like it. Might never try it myself. But I like it.
As to the cap, a boy meets boy tale of neediness and infatuation, not so much. It might've helped if the VC had used time saved not composing a cover letter to better edit the piece.
impossible to squeeze through the door jams
Unless one is planning to spread one's door on crackers or toast, it's jambs.
I fell out of my pocket!
Ouch.
Copious tense problems. Read like it was converted from past to present (probably a good decision) but lots got missed. E.g.,
Merlin had to take a phone call for work. Micah looks out the window...
had=has.
“Is that your boyfriend?” she asked...
asks
And so on, and so on.
I'm not gay. Nor am I homophobic (is anyone anymore?). Still, once it became clear that honest Micah and gorgeous Merlin are going to spend the rest of the story batting eyelashes and brushing locks of hair out of each other's eyes, and possibly more, I started to read faster. Yes, I have my own personal sexual preferences and biases. Like if it'd been two gals, I'd probably have skimmed for the sex scene. But given it's two dudes, I aimed to skip past, which, and mercifully as it happens, is the end. Wisely, I think, their subsequent boinkage is only cleverly alluded to.
I haven't looked at our guidelines here lately, but I'm pretty sure we don't, as do so many others, express any LGBTQ2+ (have I missed any letters?) leanings. So no leg up in that regard. This offering will not rise Terminalward to further punishment. That said, though, I wish long lives and much happiness for M & M as I guide them tenderly to the Porthole.