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Post by sturgeon on May 8, 2021 21:55:01 GMT
This capital gave Carol an orgasm? Holy shit. Dunno what that says about her. This cap is vulgar, silly, gratuitously violent and packed full of grammatical errors. It's a sick love story between an alcoholic and a junkie being haunted by clowns during an apocalyptic forest fire.
And I really liked it.
It's super scrappy, in both senses of the word, with occasional laugh-out-loud moments. I haven't felt such an uncomfortable mixture of slapstick and threat since Who Framed Roger Rabbit. And it kept doubling down, getting more and more ridiculous - around chapter 10 or 11 I feared it had gone too far; the action went full bizzaro, and Evan and Cassie's characters ceased to be distinct. It escalated to a schlock ending worthy of Robert Rodriguez.
Was it all a giant metaphor for the impossible odds of overcoming addiction?
Nope. Really not.
There is a fine line between genius and madness, and I've no doubt that this cap spent more time on the side of madness, but the monkey was most definitely nudged.
I'm giving this a yes vote. Let's see if it can overcome the impossible odds of Bulldust and Rorschalk.
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Post by bulldust on May 13, 2021 14:12:10 GMT
The Bulldog is sweating his enormous package off in the sweltering heat of Florida. Just as these tacky-ass tourists depart and return to their northern territories, the heat cranks up and turns this place into hell on Earth.
The Bullmeister has not seen anything frozen, outside an occasional desert confection or trip to the ice rink, for over a decade. It’s kind of creepy.
This brings me to “The Absence of Laughter”. This cap starts with a setup that is reminiscent of “A Christmas Story” with talk of licking frozen metallic object. However, the cap’s tone quickly changes and becomes something much more irreverent and darker.
The humor was there, but there were technical issues. For example:
“Were back on the street and I’m openly using.” Missing an apostrophe.
These would need to be addressed. My other complaint was the setup was pretty long. It was well over half of the cap before the action really started. But the setup was smooth and well executed.
To be honest, when I saw clowns, I was like ‘not again’! But this worked. I suppose clown horror is now a thing. Maybe someone should make a clown horror anthology. Maybe someone already did.
Anyway, I’ll give my yes vote. This did amuse me enough to make Rorschalk read it.
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