Post by doomey on Apr 13, 2021 14:37:00 GMT
Hey jane,
We examined the capital you sent. You mentioned “cerulean blue”. Don’t really need “blue” in there, though it is used in Crayons. At one point you typed “James eyed me skeptically.” To that point the narrative had been third person. The prose is fun, but it needs some polishing. Examine it yourself, dig in. We will pass now, but after some reconstruction, might be we could come to terms.
Best to your dearest ones,
Boligard Doomey
The Floor
www.tqrstories.com
We examined the capital you sent. You mentioned “cerulean blue”. Don’t really need “blue” in there, though it is used in Crayons. At one point you typed “James eyed me skeptically.” To that point the narrative had been third person. The prose is fun, but it needs some polishing. Examine it yourself, dig in. We will pass now, but after some reconstruction, might be we could come to terms.
Best to your dearest ones,
Boligard Doomey
The Floor
www.tqrstories.com