Post by rorschalk on Sept 22, 2020 18:39:49 GMT
Dear Mr. VC,
I'm afraid THAT HIDEOUS BRAIN has been rejected. Here's the critique that is available on the site.I've included rockefeller's response to it here just in case you are unfamiliar of the workings round these parts.
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There was something familiar about this Hideous Brain one... gave me the same vague deja vu I'm getting re-watching Curb Your Enthusiasm. But I don't think I've read it before. It's just your evil genius, who, for all his smarts and supernatural abilities and paid muscle who reminded me a little of Otto's old sidekick Travis here, somehow can't procure for himself a much desired magic talisman from its current owner (who, as it turns out, was happy to just give it away) and so hires at considerable expense the story's 1st person narrator (who tends to narrate to some 2nd person "you" who I assume is me), a playfully misogynistic noir-genre PI-dick who, as Dan Brownian coincidence would have it, just happens to drop in on another less evil but still sort of evil genius professor who knows all about the magic whatever it is, including who has it, allowing said noir PI narrator dick, pursuant to a little emotional extortion and physical and supernatural arm twisting, to easily retrieve said talisman that it might impart to its new owner its trademark brand of poetic justice, the specifics of which I've mostly forgotten. So, okay, not bad, close even, but still a no.
[Rocks pries open the Porthole, which seems to be stuck. There are a couple pieces of corn, some stringy looking green stuff and what appears to be blood spatter left from Carol's cleaning that Rocks smears around with the cap's cover page. Good enough. That oughta do till the next time DD tries to party with Boli.]
Place has kinda gone to hell since Dep left, n'est pas?
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Again, thank you for the submission and I look forward to doing business with you in the future.
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I'm afraid THAT HIDEOUS BRAIN has been rejected. Here's the critique that is available on the site.I've included rockefeller's response to it here just in case you are unfamiliar of the workings round these parts.
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There was something familiar about this Hideous Brain one... gave me the same vague deja vu I'm getting re-watching Curb Your Enthusiasm. But I don't think I've read it before. It's just your evil genius, who, for all his smarts and supernatural abilities and paid muscle who reminded me a little of Otto's old sidekick Travis here, somehow can't procure for himself a much desired magic talisman from its current owner (who, as it turns out, was happy to just give it away) and so hires at considerable expense the story's 1st person narrator (who tends to narrate to some 2nd person "you" who I assume is me), a playfully misogynistic noir-genre PI-dick who, as Dan Brownian coincidence would have it, just happens to drop in on another less evil but still sort of evil genius professor who knows all about the magic whatever it is, including who has it, allowing said noir PI narrator dick, pursuant to a little emotional extortion and physical and supernatural arm twisting, to easily retrieve said talisman that it might impart to its new owner its trademark brand of poetic justice, the specifics of which I've mostly forgotten. So, okay, not bad, close even, but still a no.
[Rocks pries open the Porthole, which seems to be stuck. There are a couple pieces of corn, some stringy looking green stuff and what appears to be blood spatter left from Carol's cleaning that Rocks smears around with the cap's cover page. Good enough. That oughta do till the next time DD tries to party with Boli.]
Place has kinda gone to hell since Dep left, n'est pas?
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Again, thank you for the submission and I look forward to doing business with you in the future.
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