Dear John or Jane VC (for that is no more your real name than the one you provided),
I can understand why you are using a pseudonym. This story smacks of authenticity, which is troubling given the drug-infested low-life subject matter.
I spotted a few minor errors (eg "Tiki sat next to Dan and stocked his chest"; "How did you end up at Rudi's [no q mark]"; "it opened and revealed it's bounty"; "laughingstock"), but your writing is crisp and confident.
Plot, B+. Characters, A-. Dialogue, A. Balls-out attitude, A+.
That's enough for me to send it up to the senior bastards. Let them be Melks' ultimate judge.