Post by sturgeon on Jun 1, 2022 13:59:02 GMT
Over 10,000 words? How can a VC expect to hold my fickle attention for over 10,000 words?
Well, exactly like this.
This cap features a mendacious corporate lawyer meeting the pregnant teen whose child he and his spouse wish to adopt. The meeting does not go well. Each of them start with secrets and lies, which are drawn out gradually - each new revelation threatening to shatter the progress made so far. Without moving more than a few metres, the two main characters go through a whole Hero's Journey.
The VC has achieved an impressive feat, to make the stakes feel high, and the pace feel bullish, when hardly anything happens beyond two people talking. Is it perfect? Hell no, it's a hot mess, in the best possible way. The writing is colourful, full of bants and character. There are wonderful turns of phrase and quotable moments. Any rough edges are very easy to forgive - in fact, I am in rank admiration of the VC's craft.
Rockefeller accused the ending of melodrama, but I felt the ending's sentimentality was thoroughly earned - and what's wrong with good melodrama anyway?
Note that some editorial intervention is required, in particular for incorrect spacing around single quotes (and sometimes apostrophes), and inconsistent spacing around hyphens and dashes.
Ça touche la singe. I vote yes.
Well, exactly like this.
This cap features a mendacious corporate lawyer meeting the pregnant teen whose child he and his spouse wish to adopt. The meeting does not go well. Each of them start with secrets and lies, which are drawn out gradually - each new revelation threatening to shatter the progress made so far. Without moving more than a few metres, the two main characters go through a whole Hero's Journey.
The VC has achieved an impressive feat, to make the stakes feel high, and the pace feel bullish, when hardly anything happens beyond two people talking. Is it perfect? Hell no, it's a hot mess, in the best possible way. The writing is colourful, full of bants and character. There are wonderful turns of phrase and quotable moments. Any rough edges are very easy to forgive - in fact, I am in rank admiration of the VC's craft.
Rockefeller accused the ending of melodrama, but I felt the ending's sentimentality was thoroughly earned - and what's wrong with good melodrama anyway?
Note that some editorial intervention is required, in particular for incorrect spacing around single quotes (and sometimes apostrophes), and inconsistent spacing around hyphens and dashes.
Ça touche la singe. I vote yes.
