Post by bulldust on Oct 9, 2019 15:38:29 GMT
The Bull is a crazy sort of bovine that fights adversity and loses. Well, that’s true of a lot of folks out there. But in the Bull’s case, it sometimes feels overwhelming. He remembers how he was bullied by the human children for being different. He didn’t fight back because people from the herd didn’t do such things. Only wild animals fought, and they didn’t live in the suburbs. So, the Bullmeister took his abuse, until he couldn’t take it anymore.
One day the Bulldog fought back, kicking a person who had shoved him. This of course resulted in a reprimand by the school’s administration toward the Bullman. He ended up having to apologize to the kid’s parents and caught all kinds of hell for fighting back.
In today’s cap “Under the Light of Neith and Nerine”, we begin with a bar brawl between a racist and the main character, Tony. Of course, Tony, the one who was being insulted, is the one to pay the consequences. He ends up losing rank and assigned to an isolated science station orbiting Venus.
The story, overall, was okay. I found a few typos. For example:
The view was the just about the only thing Tony had enjoyed about his sojourn on Sagan Station.
Just try not <to> screw up anything else on the Station while I’m away.
We have to throw both toggles simultaneously to get the lock<ed> door open.
The premise that suddenly the barriers of many parallel realities collapsed seemed weirdly unexplained. And the fact that people could just fade into an alternate reality was equally as improbable. But I went with it.
I think my biggest complaint about this cap is the pacing. While it contains great descriptions and world building, it lacks pacing. The cap was long, very long. A quarter of the cap was a justification of Tony’s exile to Sagan Station and another half of it was the build-up to sending him to the surface of Venus. The landing itself left me underwhelmed.
I’m going to have to go with a “no” vote on this. Although it shows promise, it feels more like a snippet from a longer work than a standalone story. Maybe Rocks will feel differently, who knows?
One day the Bulldog fought back, kicking a person who had shoved him. This of course resulted in a reprimand by the school’s administration toward the Bullman. He ended up having to apologize to the kid’s parents and caught all kinds of hell for fighting back.
In today’s cap “Under the Light of Neith and Nerine”, we begin with a bar brawl between a racist and the main character, Tony. Of course, Tony, the one who was being insulted, is the one to pay the consequences. He ends up losing rank and assigned to an isolated science station orbiting Venus.
The story, overall, was okay. I found a few typos. For example:
The view was the just about the only thing Tony had enjoyed about his sojourn on Sagan Station.
Just try not <to> screw up anything else on the Station while I’m away.
We have to throw both toggles simultaneously to get the lock<ed> door open.
The premise that suddenly the barriers of many parallel realities collapsed seemed weirdly unexplained. And the fact that people could just fade into an alternate reality was equally as improbable. But I went with it.
I think my biggest complaint about this cap is the pacing. While it contains great descriptions and world building, it lacks pacing. The cap was long, very long. A quarter of the cap was a justification of Tony’s exile to Sagan Station and another half of it was the build-up to sending him to the surface of Venus. The landing itself left me underwhelmed.
I’m going to have to go with a “no” vote on this. Although it shows promise, it feels more like a snippet from a longer work than a standalone story. Maybe Rocks will feel differently, who knows?